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God Complex [TeenEmoSobNovel]


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Theyellowflash

5:34pm Feb 13 2010 (last edited on 9:24am Apr 11 2010)

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- Story On Pause,wanna read,rmail me i guess-
 
 
 
 
 
 
luvsarahdessen97

8:59pm Feb 13 2010

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Bump :) I really like it. you're a fantastic writer
Kira333

9:58pm Feb 13 2010

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That was great, Flash. .o. I read it to my cousin and nephew, and they're like, "Woah. :O" all speechless and whatnot. My cousin seemed to be the only one listening, but... o.o'

I like the detail on the fire, by the way. o3o




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chance437

11:30pm Feb 13 2010

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Woah, that was awesome Flash... *Iz ashtonished*



Yoshi

12:17am Feb 14 2010

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Y'know. I'm starting to realise I have this weird thing about finding any little vaguely humorous thing you say to be hysterical. xD You bring out that craziness I always used to have.

... You make me craaaazay~

And, of course, epic story. All that glorious detail and emotion. ♥




Theyellowflash

1:00am Feb 14 2010 (last edited on 9:24am Apr 11 2010)

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Kiiiirraaaah, homg, thats so amazing. ive tried reading what ive written out loud. Its full of fail... maybe its just my accent though...
anways,that made me really warm and fuzzy inside <3 thanks hun and yus,detailed rainbow fire C<
 
Harhar, that made me liek, grin insanely Yoshbum. And im not even exaggerating >U> /fail
 
 and doods,thanks <3 i mean,whatthemotherofarubberduck, i go and try to sleep, come back after my futile attempts and see whole five posts |D i didnt expect to get feedback that quickly.
 
Anyways,since people actually like this (recently ive been failing out and being paranoid that my novel-o might be too boring and dull for the ma.sses) 
i might as well post the next chapter or two. I currently only have like four,but so far ive been doing chapter-a-week kind of thing... s'i guess its okey.
anyways,chapter. /endranthere
 

 

 

 (im also personally really not a fan of this one. I might totally revise it and made it more detailed n stuff. its so plain :/ )

 

-storywuzhere-

 

 

Theyellowflash

3:10pm Feb 15 2010 (last edited on 9:45am Apr 11 2010)

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Shakalaka, chaptertiem.
I'll probably post the next one on saturday. Doubt i'll be receiving much feedback thou xD (even though i would love if somebody did a lil criticizing and stuff. y'know,helpering like a true hobo-dood )
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
  

-storywuzhere-

 

 

Theyellowflash

5:06pm Feb 20 2010

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bump?:c i guess Res aint the best site when yer looking for criticism and stuff.at least i tried xD;
 
 
Yoshi

9:07pm Feb 20 2010 (last edited on 9:11pm Feb 20 2010)

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Yah, probably not. xD Still lovely though; Pride is a ball of epic. o3o

And is this the same Froze as the one who decided food sucks? o:

Ohay. Kinda random, but I just saw a guy in one of those Olympics ice-skating races who represented Latvia. Made me think of you. xD




 _Ranvier

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I'm only done with the first chapter, but I want to smack myself for not reading this sooner.

You hide your talents so well. ;o You're an awesome writer Flasherz.

Love ur stoof.

Um. I suck at critique. Because. My work sucks and I shouldn't bash other pplz stoof even if they want it. I can praise, though! 8D

Good job. <3





Theyellowflash

1:32am Feb 21 2010

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lol xD i think we got second place in something too i believe c: too bad i dont feel like watching olympics. 
 
and yep, same Froze, same food loathing c: this whole novel-writing actually started with me wanting to have a story to go with her. i think its kinda going in a completely different way though >u>
 
 
 
 
 Eh,*shrugs* praise aint all that bad either ;D /facenoms Uwiness
lol,for a moment i just stared at the screen.I mean,dood, youre like the Stephen King of Res or something.Best writer i kinda know on here. dont lie to yourself ;c tsh,tsh,tsh ... or was it 'tsk'?
 
thar,i guess i should post next chapter soon.... i promised it yesterday /fail
 
 
 
 
 
Theyellowflash

2:58am Feb 21 2010 (last edited on 9:45am Apr 11 2010)

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-storywuzhere-

 

 

Reeses

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:D Pet likes your writing.  Poor Froze, though for some reason I like that evilish guy who doesn't like people sleeping or whatnot. xD  You describe things nicely too.  Can't wait to read more. ^_^




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Theyellowflash

7:09pm Feb 24 2010

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Thanks Petters <3 im not exactly fond of my... decribiness ... or something 8( i always feel that i leave out the small details that make things real... liek,sometimes a scene or two sounds 'stiff' to me 8C i dunno. or im just afraid that it'll sound so
anyways,i think i'll post a new chapter once the cookie grabber accidents aftermath dies off c: *pokes the question-marks in her post* srsly,do those things really only haunt me?
 
Reeses

7:56pm Feb 24 2010

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Ick, I know your pain. -tried to edit her story and it like, imploded it all- D:< GIVE ME BACK MY HELVETICA FONT.  Sometimes I try to make things especially descriptive and it sounds awkward. xD




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Theyellowflash

5:32pm Mar 4 2010

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/has been having a writers block of some sort :c
 
im sorry to all the invisible people that actually read this,i'll try getting this done sometime soon
 
 ive just been really busy with pixels. i have all these commissions and collabs and stuff to finish @___@
 
 
Theyellowflash

1:32pm Mar 12 2010 (last edited on 9:46am Apr 11 2010)

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err,new chapter. its not really finished though... i dunno. I guess i'll edit it later and add some more once that blocker goes off
 
 
and i believe this is getting even more confusing now xD; i promise everything will make sense soon... or something
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
  

-storywuzhere-

 

 

NightmareDream

9:43am Mar 15 2010

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I like it, though yes, it is confusing in many parts. You have good word choice, your chapters are a good length... And you're right, you should add some detail to the places. I like it when I know what things look at because it gives me a good mental picture. I mean, I definately get a mental picture when I read this, but it could be better if you added more deion. :3



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