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Fiery

12:10pm Aug 11 2010 (last edited on 8:16am Aug 12 2010)

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I'm 10 pages into my story and I got writer's block :'( I need ideas to throw a twist into the story. Basically what you need to know is it's a teenage girl (17 yrs old) living her fantasy/dream life.

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I can do anything. Poems, stories, deions, whatever. It can be res-related or not. I have no examples to show because most of the work I do is kind of personal and the rest is unfinished/not yet edited. Because of this the first 2 will be free and posted as examples. one free commission left! none left :)

Form:

type of writing: _________ (poetry, story, etc)

approx length: _______ (or just a minimum; at least ___)

1-3 sentence deion: ___________________________ (tell me what you want so I can be as accurate as possible; if a creatu deion/story I need a few adjectives and whatnot describing the personality as well as age and gender and color and species of creatu)

character name(s): _______ (optional) 

Working On:

1. Story for Detneth106 - Free; done

2. Story for TayJaid   Free; waiting for info

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Fiery

12:14pm Aug 11 2010

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Tips are appreciated for the free ones xD lol. by the way. after the first two just offer a reasonable price. I can't make a standard price because it really depends what you want. :)



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Detneth106

12:29pm Aug 11 2010

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Could you write the story of my fursona? Uh..let me know and I'll write down the basic plot...though it's pretty much free-hand :)




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Fiery

2:14pm Aug 11 2010

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sure :) Fill out the stuff I said in the first post



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Detneth106

3:02pm Aug 11 2010 (last edited on 3:09pm Aug 11 2010)

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Form:

type of writing: Story (poetry, story, etc)

approx length: _______ (or just a minimum; at least half a page, but not too much. It's just a short story of her history.)

1-3 sentence deion:

STORY PLOT THING: Aicra was born in the downtown area of RELCORE. Entire family killed by raccoons. Radioactiveness = strange looks. That's about it. Go where you will with this story :) 

AICRA: Aicra is a small long-legged feline with lime green fur. Her underbelly is dark green and she has pampas deer-style horns on her head. Sea blue eyes. Her personality is protective and stubborn. She often starts arguments with her blunt comments. 

character name(s): Aicra (optional)





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Fiery

3:05pm Aug 11 2010

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awesome, now how long should it be? and is it just like story of her life?



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Detneth106

3:09pm Aug 11 2010

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[Yeah, after what I told you, you can make it up as you go. It's...wait, let me edit something. She was born on Relcore, not toronto. I wasn't thinking >8u]




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Fiery

3:16pm Aug 11 2010

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you still haven't told me the length xD



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Detneth106

3:31pm Aug 11 2010

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[I did, no less than half a page....and no more than two. There, is that ok?]




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Fiery

3:36pm Aug 11 2010

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oh i missed that XD wanna see what i have so far? I just started :)



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Detneth106

3:37pm Aug 11 2010

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Oh yes! ♥




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Fiery

3:46pm Aug 11 2010

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            It was early in the morning on a cloudy day in Relcore when a young kitten was born. She popped out of her mother’s belly with a yawn before starting to mew noisily. Along with her, came 3 brothers and a sister. She was by far the smallest and certainly the most peculiar. Maybe not at first, but she soon grew into that role.

            Early on, none of the kittens could see. However, they still managed to be very talkative and it was less than a week after their birth that they began opening their eyes. Not even two weeks later, the first colors of their coats began shining through the dull and gray fuzz they were born with. Her brothers, Meto, Nital, and Felos as they had named themselves became a pale cream, a bright white with a few black stripes, and a deep brown. Her sister, Lira was the name she chose, became a light gray with a seemingly violet tinge that was barely noticeable. Aicra, however, was again separate.

            Since Aicra was born, she was a bit apart from her siblings. She chose a rather odd name, she was very contradictory, and she was always straying from the group. One of her strange journeys caused some misfortune to her looks. She had wandered into a radioactive plant and it was figured out that was the reason for her odd appearances. While her siblings were developing into their first coats and adult features, Aicra’s eyes were becoming a bright sea blue instead of the normal brown. Legs were long and awkward. She had lime green fur, but a dark, leafy-green underbelly. But these are all nothing in comparison to the strangest part of her appearance: her head. It was the same lime green color as the rest of her and right beside her ears were pampas deer-style horns! Of course, none of this made any difference to her, for she had a very protective and stubborn nature that would not allow her to see anything wrong with herself.




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Fiery

3:48pm Aug 11 2010

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it's half a page single spaced and i haven't edited or anything yet :) just getting the character deions out so i can begin the story part :) I'll try to keep it short



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Detneth106

3:56pm Aug 11 2010

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[Sorry to be picky but I didn't describe her horns well. Just say antlers, cause pampas deer-style horns sounds funny xD And they're black with pale green swirls. I totally forgot about them.]




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Detneth106

3:57pm Aug 11 2010

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[But, I love the writing. It intrigues me since I didn't really have a clear picture of her life before this.  ♥]




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Fiery

4:02pm Aug 11 2010

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cool :) *edits horns* if you're putting it somewhere, you could put a pic in :)



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Detneth106

4:04pm Aug 11 2010

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[I'm getting a commish by Dustfeather done. I hope she finishes soon. ♥ I'll show you when it's done. But my fursona looks a bit like Innagongs if you need a ref.]




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Fiery

4:37pm Aug 11 2010

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            It was early in the morning on a cloudy day in Relcore when a young kitten was born. She popped out of her mother’s belly with a yawn before starting to mew noisily. Along with her, came 3 brothers and a sister. She was by far the smallest and certainly the most peculiar. Maybe not at first, but she soon grew into that role.

            Early on, none of the kittens could see. However, they still managed to be very talkative and it was less than a week after their birth that they began opening their eyes. Not even two weeks later, the first colors of their coats began shining through the dull and gray fuzz they were born with. Her brothers, Meto, Nital, and Felos as they had named themselves became a pale cream, a bright white with a few black stripes, and a deep brown. Her sister, Lira was the name she chose, became a light gray with a seemingly violet tinge that was barely noticeable. Aicra, however, was again separate.

            Since Aicra was born, she was a bit apart from her siblings. She chose a rather odd name, she was very contradictory, and she was always straying from the group. One of her strange journeys caused some misfortune to her looks. She had wandered into a radioactive plant and it was figured out that was the reason for her odd appearances. While her siblings were developing into their first coats and adult features, Aicra’s eyes were becoming a bright sea blue instead of the normal brown. Legs were long and awkward. She had lime green fur, but a dark, leafy-green underbelly. But these are all nothing in comparison to the strangest part of her appearance: her head. It was the same lime green color as the rest of her and right beside her ears were antlers, black antlers with pale green swirls!  Of course, none of this made any difference to her, for she had a very protective and stubborn nature that would not allow her to see anything wrong with herself.

            Aicra’s nature made it hard for others to get along with her. She rarely even talked to her own family because of this! She was a loner despite the fact that she would go back home every night. And there were good days when she would spend time with her mother and siblings. Then they could run around and play and she would just be quiet for once. They’d run in the bushes, climb trees, or splash in ponds. Some days they’d even go to Scria or Atquati, but never Reiflem because it was too hot.

            Late in the year, Aicra’s family always made the trip to Scria and vacationed there for a while with some relatives. This would be the third annual trip for the family and everyone was getting excited, even Aicra was a bit. Then, something set her off. First one small thing would get her cranky, then something else, and so on until soon she was in one of her moods. She refused to talk to anyone, but most of all she refused to go with them. Later on, of course, she shed a few tears, but she knew she would manage easily until they returned.

            Many say that distance makes the heart grow fonder. One must *censored*ume this is true, because at the return of her family Aicra seemed to mellow a bit. There were more days she would spend time with them and less when she was in her melancholy shell. She still wandered off often because she was very independent, but for a little while at least, she had changed slightly.

            Her fourth birthday was nearing and Aicra felt uneasy. She spent very little time with her family because as she grew more independent and protective of her nature, her siblings were branching out and her mother was tiring. She made no effort to connect with anyone because it was hard for her to be trusted or trust others. Her appearance warded everyone off. She was used to it and did not worry herself. She would not and could not change, because to her stubborn mind she was perfect and would never admit to faults. Any criticism caused her to become very protective and cautionary. Anything said caused an argument and so she remained alone.

            When Aicra came back one day she noticed something out of place. Where was everyone and what was that awful smell? She gasped as her mind raced. There had to be an explanation. Maybe they’re all at a party or with friends, she thought. Then her eyes confirmed her thoughts. Vengeance. She swore to have vengeance and to give no mercy. At the loss of her family, all of her family, tears flowed. She turned and left.

            A year and a half later, something came to put an end to her misery. No more would she kill every raccoon she saw and something other than hatred was able to fill her heart. She trusted and was trusted. It was Detneth. He found her, pitied her, and instantly loved her. She came into his home and felt happiness. She was considered a beauty instead of an outcast and may their happiness remain forever.




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Fiery

4:37pm Aug 11 2010

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Hope you like it :) let me know if you want any edits.



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Detneth106

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[e.o I'm a she. My profile is very misleading...]




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