Welcome to the races!


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DreamFall

10:56pm Jun 27 2015 (last edited on 11:57pm Jun 27 2015)

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Welcome to my new thread, here I will be trying something new. I don't know if its been done before, its a idea I came up with.

Here's how it works, im going to be writing a story, I will write the prologue and the first paragraph. After that if you would like me to continue donate any amount of tu, for each person who donates a amount, I will write one paragraph for each person. You cannot space it out through the day, however many time or little amount you donate, it counts as one paragraph that I will write for my story for that person. I would like generous amounts so I can enjoy writing while earning tu. All proceeds will go toward my dream goal of a r-ray.

I also thought It would be nice to let everyone know who contributed to my goal and how much they donated. This I will post right below, thank everyone who is helping me by donating! ^^

User      Amount Donated

          Gravy:      1,000,000 tu                   


You wander around looking for the entrance. You heard about it from the whispering partins at the local inn. The great annual 2 month long races. You got excited and knew you had to find it. But you did not know what awaited you at the entrance. Its said to be guarded by two massive forms. You don't worry though at the time as you just want to find where the races are. All you knew as you listened in on the partins conversations was it was located in the deep woods of Atquati. You wonder how such a race could fit there but a lot of creatures are there too and you have to search all day before finding one. You continue on until you come to a worn down path. It looks recently used and you never seen it here before. And yet you walk by this spot everyday to go to the springs. You step forward about to chance your luck walking down it when two massive forms step out from behind a tree on either side.

One is a white and offset grey coloring and the other is a dark grey almost black with silver hair lining some of the outer edges, giving the beast a defined look. The dark one was smirking, the white one was silent and appeared to not even have a mouth. Where both of there eyes should have been was a Smokey essence flowing around inside and a tendril flowing out, the tendril extended to about 3 feet before it would slow and condenses at the end, they moved about feeling around and would curl at the touch of some objects near by. The dark one turns it one of it eyes towards you and beckons with a tendril, the white one wait patiently. The black one heads down the path and turns back, one of its tendrils beckons like a finger and you decide to follow, soon after you start following the white ones comes in behind, as all three of you go down the path, the foliage around the entrance closes in and covers the path, you then knew why you never saw it before. A few seconds later you come into a clearing, here you here all kinds of noises as creatures go walking by in gear and owners follow behind, and just normal people walking about. Just as you turn and watch the forms of the two shapes disappear back into the undergrowth a nearby speaker starts to crackle and a announcer comes on and you decide to listen as you read the banner overhead of you connecting to one of the post the speaker is on.


"Welcome to the Races!"

Announcer: "Ladies and gentleman, and creatures of all shapes and sizes, Welcome to the annual 2 month long races!

This year we have many creatures competing for the races. Usually the races are centered around land loving creatures, but this year we will include flying creatures. The main races will be centered around one creature in the flying races and one in the land races. Please enjoy your stay and don't forget, there's a donation box right by the entrance of the entrance. Stop by it on your way out. But remember this don't think about stealing it, the guardians will get you. So please mind your manners!" *The announcer clicks off the microphone and the sound of the warning horns for the first race getting to start begins.*

Me: The first chapter will be centered around a land creature, after I feel this chapter is done, I will switch to a air creature. And as I consider how it would go I may consider a water creature race.







DreamFall

11:19pm Jun 27 2015 (last edited on 12:43am Jun 28 2015)

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(The first chapter is going to be centered around a Ezahni name OrionsCurse, he will be know as Orion for short to make typing and the story flow better.)

To first set the scene. It is a island but a very big one. The races take place deep into the woods in a large open area where the stand and stalls are centered,  (The races are not always in view of the viewers near the stalls and stands[where it starts]) as the races run through the woods, there are many spots along the way where there Is a path that leads to small areas where tourist and so on can wait for the animals to pass by that bend or area of the dirt track. The dirt track is about 8 feet wide. Another thing, the animals will talk and speak but all the humans or tourist hear is the sounds of that animal that it would normally make. This way it stay interesting as the character engages with other characters they may appear in the story. If you would also like to see a creature show up at some point let me know, ill try to incorporate it into the story in some way for a couple or more paragraphs. ^^ If it is wild let me know, if it Is tame and would be in the race, give me a name for it! Nothing too long or complicated, if its long what is its nickname? And is it a boy or girl?

Chapter 1 Paragraph 1:

Orion went trotting through the crowd, just moments earlier he heard the warning bell for the first race begin, he was going to be late! He stamped his hooves with impatience and snorted out of his nostrils, partins nearby finally saw him and slowly, much too slowly moved out of his way. He finally had a straight path and started moving once again, slowing maneuvering into a cantor, he flew by the crowd and many backed up even more as he seemed to not care for there toes they may be in the way of his hooves. His hooves hit the ground with the steady thu thump, thu thump sound, sounding through the ground. Not min later would this would be heard but not just the single hooves of one but the feet and hooves of many as the races begin and the sound of the starting bell, so much louder then the other sounded and all begin to cheer as the animals all took off down the path.

Orin bolted down the path as fast as he could, he was in the lead for a few min before another racer overtook him. It was a Leverene, a fast one at that. His legs were really long and quite powerful with forceful jumps. He sprang forward with great leaps but he knew he would over take him soon, he was going to get wore out to soon wasting energy like that. He was not meant to be a racer, he was meant to run short distances fast. He soon realized that as he started to slow and Orion overtook him still cantering at a steady pace. Orion knew he had a better chance then others at this race. He was born to race! But he was going to find out he wasn't the only one born to race...


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