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bethy7070

1:39pm Feb 1 2009

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A novel I have just started.Rate and comment!

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Chapter One - Life

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Life is hard.And long.But what is the point of life?I don't really know.In fact, my life is all about how I am going to find a way out of this monstrisity.I am a blood-thirsty dragon,known as Lady Dragoness Elizabeth of Dragola.As an Animagus,I decided that I should have a go at human life.Just now I am in my human form but when I am a Dragon I am covered in pink , scaly skin.My belly is a snow white colour with red peircing eyes.But in my human form I have pinkish skin and red flaming hair that is about shoulder length.In Dragon I am 110, but as a human I look 15, young enough for High School.

Didn't I have a choice?No, or that's what it seems like to me.I'd shift into a dragon when I was too thirsty.But I was different.I could read minds of other dragons and humans, no matter the distance between me and them.I also hunted animals not humans.Why should I attack humans?They were innocent.Completely.So now I have to notice how un-beleivebally selfish I am.I have my own land, I have took many lifes and I have had slaves.So,it brings us back to my plan.To become a human.

 

 

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Chapter Two -Excitement

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I packed some decent human needs.Clothes, Check.Brush , Check.Deoderant , Check.I zipped my suitcase and then carried my bag out of the hotel.I checked out at the big recepion.I gave in my keys and walked out the hotel into the busy streets of New York.I had a plain black top with short sleves.I had my skinny jeans on and my black high heels.I got a taxi and gave him directions to the airport.

bethy7070

1:44pm Feb 1 2009

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That is all I have wrote so far.
Flammable

8:31pm Feb 1 2009

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I don't know what kind of crazy punctuation you got in India, but here in America you put spaces after your punctuation, and not before.
bethy7070

10:39am Feb 2 2009

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Grr,I am not Indian xD

I just do that by habit D=

pulsedrive

11:10am Feb 28 2009

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Errr, I would only say a 2/10...the writing structure is list-like, and your setup isn't at all organized or captivating. Those two paragraphs could be the main setting or idea of the first chapter, but try to add onto it, like making it more diive. Maybe a flashback could do for describing her dragon form? 

   Hope that wasn't too harsh C= 





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