My Best Friend [A True Story]


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ZoeyRedbird

8:45pm Jan 31 2010

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((Well, the main idea is true, not some of the details.)) 

Chapter One

So this is the end. The end of the friendship that had lasted me more than five years. The one that ended because of her, because of Emilie, I thought scornfully.

i was in my tiny, twin sized bed, the same as every morning. Except, today wasn't like every other morning, today was the day I had realized how powerful and hurtful people in middle school could be.

I knew it was coming, I thought.

I finally decided to get up and get the day over with. I made it to the stairs without getting distracted. Halfway down, I paused at the mirror. I looked at myself, and sighed, my straight black hair waving as I did. I looked at my nose, small-nostrilled and freckle-covered as it had always been. I scratched it, and moved on.

When I made my way into the kitchen, I stopped again. I half expected my mother to be there, packing my lunch and kissing me good bye like she had when I was in elementary school.

I shook my head. She hadn't done that for years, and probably never would again.

I took a package of Pop Tarts out from the cabinet, and popped them in the toaster, my black-covered nails flying. While they were heating, I turned on the television. it was Saturday, and I waned to relax. I plopped onto the pristine, perfect white couch, my skull earings bobbing. I flipped through the channels, but there wasn't anything good on.

Oh well, I thought, biting into my pop Tart.

I watched the news all morning, clutching a pillow. The same stories played over, and over, and over again. So, I decided to try and deal with the matter at hand. How do I get Sarah, my former best friend, back from Emilie.

Sarah and I had been together for as long as I could remember. We had laughed together, took swiming lessons together, and even wished together. No, seriously. Seperatley, we had wished on the same star that had pa.ssed. We thought it was pretty cool.

But now she was gone. Taken. Turned. I didn't know what had happened.

Maybe over the summer? I thought, closing my eyes. It was only eleven o'clock, but I was dead tiered. I felt like my body had just run five miles, but my mind was somewhere else when that had happened. I had just started to nod off when from upstairs came Her voice. Her, my step mother, with her stupid blonde hair and bad skin, probably with her fluffy, pink 'Diva' mask on.

"Kris, get me my ointment!" she yelled half asleep.

"Be right there," I yelled back at her.

I got up and ran, on all fours, quickly up the stairs. 

((Please criticise!! I need all the help I can get!)) 




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xoholaxo

2:58pm Feb 1 2010

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Lol! I luv;"Kris! Get my ointment!"

thats great.  sorry to hear about it though.




luvsarahdessen97

8:19pm Feb 1 2010

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I like it sooo much! Your deion is incredible!!! :) as for criticism- your puncuation and grammer sometimes is a little bit odd and sometimes you use "million dollar words" when simple words would do fine and simple words when something formal and impressive would be much better. It's hard to understand, I haven't mastered it all all, but it's worth it. Please continue, though, you are really talented.
ZoeyRedbird

7:39am Feb 2 2010

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((Thanks guys. I'll post the second chapter soon. Maybe even tonight.... if I don't have homework.))



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thaliaflame98

10:04am Feb 7 2010

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Oh! I love it! It reminds me of what happened  to me. My stories are, "This is a story/song" and "story about song I wrote". How funny that the girl Emilie, destroyed your friendship, because what happened to me, a girl named Emily killed mine. :-( I wish you hope and hapiness.



"Monsters are real. Ghosts are too. They live inside us and sometimes they win." ~Stephen King
thaliaflame98

10:05am Feb 7 2010

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Also, my friend and I have been friends for 4 yrs now. And, I'm going to middle school next year. LOL. Do you like sad stories? I wrote one called "The day Angel Fell...True story plz read!" So yes.. GREAT STORY!!!



"Monsters are real. Ghosts are too. They live inside us and sometimes they win." ~Stephen King
ZoeyRedbird

11:00am Feb 7 2010

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Thanks Thalia! Well, for the sake of privacy, names have been changed. Her name is known throughout the school for being evil, so i just randomly chose the name.



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thaliaflame98

12:57pm Feb 7 2010

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Oh. HAHA!!!



"Monsters are real. Ghosts are too. They live inside us and sometimes they win." ~Stephen King
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