i have a few poems i want to write here and i want an honest opinion.

Road to heaven

Your end was like a windy day, your there and then your gone, no painful words, so unexpected you walk the road to heaven. *whoo* like dust,  you blew away, leaving most behind, the only things you bear to carry, your memories, our love, our tears and care will guide you there, across the road to heaven. everywhere i look, i see you in thier faces, i see you in their eyes, why'd you have to die? you walk the road to heaven. i remember all my hateful words, "why bother?" "who cares?" i long to take them, pull them out, throw them all away, then grasp the good ones, hold them tight, keep them near and pray at night, for we are with you, rest in peace, let God grip you and whisper, "Welcome"

The Dreamer

I dream of being someone important, someone who everyone wants to be, but im not, im just another oak in the grove, another breeze made by wind. in my dreams im the tallest oak, the strongest breeze, in my dreams, im the hero, the wanted, the helper, the healer. everyone thanks me for what ive done. what a different matter, reality. you do something good they murmer "uh huh" they whisper "yeah right!" they scream "Im fine!" Life is so complacated, dreams are so easy, you look up and say "why not?"

So those are the poems ive wrote later or tomarrow i will post one ive heard. road to heven was a request from a friend that i write. the dreamer i just thought of. so if anyone wants a custom poem writen by me, tell me and i will add it right here. but i still want critics to tell me weater or not i did good so then i can improve. so see you later i have to go for now.