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kwinn325

6:25pm Nov 14 2009

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http://zaofanclub.webs.com/

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kwinn325

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Raru

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But before I start I will say I'm not going to review its content as I'm not keen on these sort of things |D If you really want my honest opinion on it, you may ask but don't say I didn't warn you.

Now I must start with this: Check your spelling an grammar! I see things like 'It was very close to dieing' and the wrong 'your' D8 The first step to being a good author is to prove you know simple things such as spelling and grammar (pfft, I don't actually think it's all that simple). If you can't, it would lead to some people looking down on your ability.

Second, be careful of the words you choose. Words like 'mom' is rather informal for this type of writing unless in speech.

I'm not going to review a lot at the moment, I think your main priority right now is to check spelling and grammar. Then I'll go through it in more detail and give more feedback. If you need help, you can ask me but I have to warn you that my grammar checking is not great, decent though xD





kwinn325

9:53am Nov 15 2009

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I decided I going to get a editor to do that. I'm so busy doing the other chapter that i don't really have time to go back and fix them. Thank you for being honest.



Raru

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Well to be frank, you can't say 'busy with other chapter' and not bother with the small details. It's not, in my opinion, a valid excuse.

Sometimes you have to take the time to correct them or at the very least make less of them in the future.





kwinn325

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I know. I just don't really want to stop writing and take the time to go back and correct EVERY THING.



wolfspirit25

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Raru is right, it doesn't matter how amazing your story is or how much you develop your characters or how hard you work on your chapters if no one can understand it. Sure, sometimes little errors are alright, and people can still understand the story with them, but when they start piling on it gets a little difficult. A lot of people will put down a great story just because there are too many spelling errors or grammatical errors that make it difficult to understand.

Usually, authors will outline the general idea of what their story will contain, then they will go back and outline what happens in each chapter (although the exact contents of the chapter will often change as the writing progresses). Once they generally know what they want, they will start writing their stories. However, they will never just write a chapter and drop it completely. I know of several famous authors that have spent over a week agonizing over a single sentence and how to best structure it.

Granted, I understand that you have a life outside of writing unlike them, but taking the time to make sure things are spelled correctly and your grammar is good at the end of each chapter will save time later. Maybe you'll go back to the first chapter and be extremely confused as to what you initially meant by a sentence. Catch errors as they come up and stomp them to dust. Go back now and edit all of the errors and then continue with the rest of the story.

Maybe when you're going back over the story and correcting it, you'll realize something you could have said better or that there's a huge inconsistency in your writing somewhere. You don't want to be so far along in your story that it completely destroys it. What if that inconsistency completely throws off the rest of your story? You'll have to start from scratch. Better nip it in the bud early as they say than have to rewrite the entire thing right? After all, this chapter that you're busy writing could be made obsolete by that one inconsistency. You would have wasted all that time writing it just to scrap it and start over, not such a great use of your time.

 

As to the editor thing, they're there to catch the things you missed and look at the story from a fresh perspective to make sure everything makes sense. They are not there to edit every sentence for grammar and spelling errors. Yes, you might miss some things after going over your chapter again, and that's fine, that's what the editor is there for. But if you make them edit everything without even giving it a once-over to get the obvious stuff out of the way for them, you'll find yourself with an extremely unhappy editor, or no editor at all. 




Raru

4:06am Nov 16 2009 (last edited on 4:09am Nov 16 2009)

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I love you, wolfspirit ;_ ; (<-- example of someone who spends one month on one sentence)

Yep, what wolfspirit25 says is correct. In fact, they say it better than me.





wolfspirit25

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wolfspi is a girl, for clarification purposes. From that face it looks like you've edited some stuff like the things I mentioned in my last paragraph, I know the feeling.

I didn't really say anything novel or unique, I just wrote from my experiences. Generally, I'm not the person that agonizes over one sentence for a week (mostly because what I write has shorter deadlines) but I've been known to change one sentence many many many times, so it's close enough.

 I hope we can chat sometime, you seem interesting to talk to. 




Raru

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I'm flattered you think so though mind you I've never been much of a talker.

I'd love to chat more but then I'd feel like I'm invading on someone's forum xD Mayb some other day then.





kwinn325

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Um bump?



kwinn325

6:15pm Nov 22 2009

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Bump.



unspoken

7:01pm Nov 22 2009

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Free BUMP!

<3

kwinn325

2:40pm Nov 23 2009

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I renamed the book "Shades of gray"



unspoken

6:29pm Nov 23 2009

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Really?

Why?

kwinn325

2:55pm Nov 24 2009

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Because its a way better name then "demon forever"



unspoken

7:44pm Nov 24 2009

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Lol. Guess so.
kwinn325

2:50pm Nov 28 2009

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Bump. -.-"



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