Ardur Description.

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EmoRotweiler	5:53pm Dec 3 2009 (last edited on 4:09pm Dec 5 2009)
Normal User Posts: 923	Forget About The Deion D:< updating
31117_SugarDiamonds	6:05pm Dec 3 2009
Normal User Posts: 259	It's wonderful. :O fails at writing But personally I think you used the word Ardur too much. Other than that, it's perfect. :D Bloody Tiara Armada: 242
EmoRotweiler	6:07pm Dec 3 2009
Normal User Posts: 923	Goes to fix thankies hugs sugarbutt updating
�_Ranvier	8:08pm Dec 3 2009 (last edited on 8:09pm Dec 3 2009)
Normal User Posts: 1,731	Grammar is a bit off in places. I'd check that. And it sounds like you have some fragments/odd sounding sentences. o3o Just me.
EmoRotweiler	8:19pm Dec 3 2009
Normal User Posts: 923	ok goes to word to fix updating
Nouveau	11:34am Dec 5 2009
Normal User Posts: 2,962	It's nice, but could use a lot of work. For instance, you don't add an apostrophe (sp?) after a plural noun. For example: Back's This looks like the word is "back is", and not the plural of back. If you fix those errors, your writing will look a lot better, and make more sense. ^o^ Actively inactive. Formerly lolalover6.
EmoRotweiler	4:08pm Dec 5 2009
Normal User Posts: 923	im not doing anymore fixing on this fail, im not applying anymore so im deleting this deion. updating

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