A little town, a little bear, a teen girl, and a giant change.


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fullmoon

5:26pm Jan 9 2010 (last edited on 10:12pm Jan 9 2010)

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In a  new toy store, on JayBlue ave, is a toy store. There are millions of toys. And lets just say, that in this toy store, the toys pick their owners, not the other way around......
Chap. one
A little girl's dream. Of teddy bears.
"Come on mom!" Isabell impatiently pulled on her mother's sleeve. "I want to go to the new to store!"
"Fine," Isabell's mother sighed. They went into the toystore. A friendly-looking man stood at the counter, grinning. "And what are you searching for, sweetums?" Isabell quickly replied, "A teddy bear." The man's smile grew wider. "Okay then, follow me." He went to the corner of the store, where two shelves were full to the brim with stuffed bear. Isabell breathed in. "Wow.... It'll take me so long to choose!"
"Oh, I think it'll be easy. Let's just say.... it'll choose you. Happy hunting!" And the man walked away. Isabell then quickly scanned the shelves, but not one popped out. Then, at that moment, there, on the top shelf, right side, was a snow white bear. It had smothering brown chocolate eyes, and a brown bow that looked as if it was made out of coffee suspended in the air. It was dirty and looked very old, and Isabell's heart lept out for it. "I'll take that one!" Isabell announced. "Way up there??!" Her mother's voice was full of horror. "How do we get up there???" It was true, the shelves were about 16 feet tall. Suddenly, the man appeared out of no-where, carrying the largest ladder Isabell had seen in her life. In a flash, the man was up on the ladder, and back down again, handing the bear to Isabell. "Is that all?"
"Yes, it is," Isabell's mom said quickly before Isabell could run off to look at more. "Good day then."
Two years later.....
Isabell stormed into her room in rage. Since dad left, Mom's been so..... so..... inconsiderate of other people's feelings! Isabell reached out for a stuffed tiger and remembered her mental note from earlier. Clean out stuffies. Isabel lopened her toy closet. It was filled to the brim with stuffies and dolls. She instantly threw the dolls away exept for one that was a heirloom. She then looked at the stuffies. Throw away, keep, keep, throw away, throw away...... Soon, she was at the to pshelf. She reached into the back of it, and felt something. Something soft. Shee clenched it and pulled. It was a very dirty white bear,with smothering chocolate brown eyes and a brown ribbon that looked *censored* if it was made with a string of coffee. Throw aw- "Don't!" Isabell spun around. "Who's there?"
"I'm in your hand, silly! And stop squeezing me so hard!" Isabell screamed, and let go of the teddy bear. "Ouch!" It screamed. The bear then stood up on wobbley legs. "You know," She mused. "I haven't walked since two and a half years ago." Isabell's mind was whirling.  The toystore on JayBlue avenue! "Y-your alive?"
"Iam indeed. Why did you stick me in a stuffy closet? You used to play with me for hours on end, we had tea parties..... boy was that tea good!"
"Just stop! You shouldn't be alive, in fact, I thought I put you in my stuffed bear collection on the shelf up there!" Isabell pointed to a shelf filled whith bears. Mental note:Clean those up, too. The beear shook it's head. "Too cramped. Anyway, you should remember my name, you called out to it so often." Isabell wracked her brain for the answer. Stoogy-bear! Naw, I won't use that, I'll use Stooges. "Stooges!" The bears little face came into a broad smile. "Yes! But you must know that I'm here because you need help."
"Help? Why do I need help?"
 



SugarRush

5:35pm Jan 9 2010

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I like it ;D but When someone talks you make a new paragraph



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fullmoon

5:47pm Jan 9 2010

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Oh, thanxs! Done! The bear's deion is based on the teddy bear I got for free today. Her name is Stooge.



Yoshi

5:54pm Jan 9 2010

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I like the idea, but I think it would have more impact if you didn't lay it all out for us before you actually get to the story. Makes it seem repetitive, especially since you stated a lot of the exact same things later on.



fullmoon

10:11pm Jan 9 2010

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Got more done! My computer's being stupid and glitchy, and when I tried to write the rest, it dissconnected. Had to do it all over again. :(



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