~La Tua Cantante~


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Metachick

7:08pm Jul 20 2009 (last edited on 3:50pm Sep 7 2009)

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This is a story that I am writing. I have no credit for Markus. He belongs completely to Dragonstar. Please tell me what you think ^^.

 

Chapter 1:

Hush my little Angel, don't cry. Trouble is on its way to find you, dear precious. Stay awake, keep your eyes open. Monster's are coming. Run. Hide. The witching hour is close at hand.

Near twelve at night, Angel was walking around outside without her parents with her. She looked around, taking in all the sights she could see. The world was huge from a five-year-old's point of view. When she came across things she hadn't seen before, her bright green eyes widened until they looked like owl-eyes.

"Did you see h-"

"What is she doing out th-" 

"Where's her mother?"

"Little girl! Come here girlie!"

Stopping, Angel turned around and spotted three men following her. Not know who they were, she took one scared step back before bursting into a run.

Picking up her speed, she ran a slight bit faster and her little legs carried her as fast as they could. Glancing behind her, she saw the three men still follow her. Coming up to an alley entrance, she quicjky scooted into it, hoping to catch them by surprise.

"Hey there she goes!" The man pointed towards Angel's disappearing form.

Feeling tears run down her cheeks, she forced herself to keep going no matter how tired she was getting. Angel heared their laughter, their running footsteps. Panting, she realized she was running out of steam.

As she turned another corner, she winced slightly as her ribs hurt from her breathing too hard. But as she rounded it, she tripped on her foot and fell down at the feet of another person. Looking up slowly, she saw a teenager leaning against a wall tapping one foot along with some unknown music.

His hair was the colour of snow. As he noticed her, his head moved in her direction and she saw glowing crimson eyes. Not knowing it, Angel had just met her first vampire.

(( This part was written by Dragonstar...who is helping with the story ))

The man pushed himself off the wall and knelt down so he didn't look so big. He held out a hand with his white palm facing upwards. "Do you need some help getting up?" he asked with a voice that sounded like soft rain. Angel nodded with a small, sad frown on her face as a tear rolled down her cheek. She placed one of her small hands on his larger white one. Smiling softly, he closed his finger gently around Angel's hand and stood up, pulling her up to her feet.

Then the three men that were chasing her rounded the corner. Angel quickly hide behind the tall-white-haired-man's legs.

"Hey, there is that girly behind the albino," one man cawed. He sounded like a crow.

The vampire raised one eyebrow and glanced at Angel; "Do you know these men?" Angel shook her head and hid her eyes by placing them close to his black jeans. The vampire said to the three men; "I'm sorry, but she doesn't really know you."

Another man laughed like a hyena. "We don't care," he laughed again.

The vampire tilted his head to one side. "Please leave," he said in a completely different tone. It sounded forceful and demanding. The three men laughed and Angel hugged one of the vampire's legs. Narrowing his eyes, a sudden wind picked up from in front of the vampire; heading towards the three men.

As it buffeded them, it picked up speed and strenght. As the men fought to stand upright, the moved backwards before fleeeing the way they came. The wind died down and the vampire gently released Angel from his leg.

Thats the first chapter. If you want the second one, post your ideas and give me some feedback. I'll be rewriting the chapter to make it longer when I finish the story. My chapters are just short right now ... Thank you and enjoy... ^^ Look for updates.




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Dragonstar

7:20pm Jul 20 2009

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Of course teh Dragon likes it. -gives two thumbs up- Also, she could help make chapter longer or work on chapter two...






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Metachick

7:22pm Jul 20 2009 (last edited on 7:22pm Jul 20 2009)

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That would be great Dragonstar ^^ I already revised three times...I need to make it longer. XD I think you should send your ideas about how He will act. Cause he is your character in teh first place.




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Dragonstar

7:43pm Jul 20 2009

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Teh Dragon knows. And she just got an idea!.

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The man pushed himself off the wall and knelt down so he didn't look so big. He held out a hand with his white palm facing upwards. "Do you need some help getting up?" he asked with a voice that sounded like soft rain. Angel nodded with a small, sad frown on her face as a tear rolled down her cheek. She placed one of her small hands on his larger white one. Smiling softly, he closed his finger gently around Angel's hand and stood up, pulling her up to her feet.

Then the three men that were chasing her rounded the corner. Angel quickly hide behind the tall-white-haired-man's legs.

"Hey, there is that girly behind the albino," one man cawed. He sounded like a crow.

The vampire raised one eyebrow and glanced at Angel; "Do you know these men?" Angel shook her head and hid her eyes by placing them close to his black jeans. The vampire said to the three men; "I'm sorry, but she doesn't really know you."

Another man laughed like a hyena. "We don't care," he laughed again.

The vampire tilted his head to one side. "Please leave," he said in a completely different tone. It sounded forceful and demanding. The three men laughed and Angel hugged one of the vampire's legs. Narrowing his eyes, a sudden wind picked up from in front of the vampire; heading towards the three men.

As it buffeded them, it picked up speed and strenght. As the men fought to stand upright, the moved backwards before fleeeing the way they came. The wind died down and the vampire gently released Angel from his leg.






Nothing can stop the US Air Force except lightning within five nautical miles.

Metachick

7:51pm Jul 20 2009

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(( ZOMG THAT WAS FABULOUS :DD I ish going to copy them both to the computer. :D. that was great ^^



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1ran

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-sits in thread-



Dragonstar

11:18am Jul 21 2009

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Thankies me
ta. -bows-






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Metachick

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No problem ^^. This is still chapter one xD. Hmm Need to think of what else I can add xD




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Honeybee

2:00pm Jul 21 2009

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I luff it. Make Dani into it ext as a werewolf. 8D.



my name's russ and i only care about uldavi and cute men
Dragonstar

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But this is a Human/Vampire romance-ish story...






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Honeybee

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It can be a love triangle between the 3 of them. >:D



my name's russ and i only care about uldavi and cute men
Metachick

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{{ O-o XD Russy thats hilarous but this isn't a werewolf roleplay D; Its vampires... }}



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CrimsonFire

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I LOVE IT! MAKE ANOTHER CHAPTER NOW!



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Metachick

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[[ XD I have to have Dragonstar help me >.< I'm braindead at the moment xD }}



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Dragonstar

11:56am Jul 23 2009

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Dragon is trying to think of something else, but for some reason, she can't!!






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Dragonstar

12:19pm Jul 31 2009

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...

Still

Can't 

Think!






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CrimsonFire

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THINK~



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Dragonstar

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Momenti.






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Nouveau

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Ooh, I loved it!  ;D  I can't wait for the next chapter!  -^^






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Dragonstar

7:22pm Aug 19 2009 (last edited on 7:35pm Aug 19 2009)

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me
ta's Old Version;
 

Hush little Angel. Don't cry little Angel. Trouble is coming for you, my dear. Stay awake, don't close your eyes. Monsters are coming. Run and hide.

    Angel looked around, taking in the sites around her. From a five year old's point of view, the world was huge. Angel's bright green eyes widened as she took in things she'd never seen before.

   "Did you see h-"

    "What is she doing out thi-"

    "Where's her mother?"

    "Little girl! Come here, girlie!"

   Angel turned toward the voices. Three men were following her. She didn't know them. She was scared.

   She ran faster, looking behind her to see if they were still following. Seeing that they were, she suddenly turned into an alley way, catching them by surprise.

  "Hey, there she goes!"

  The man pointed to Angel's disappearing form.

    Angel could feel the tears running down her cheeks as she forced herself to keep going. She could hear them running after her, laughing, knowing she would get too tired to run any longer. She also knew that she was running out of steam.

  She was breathing hard and her ribs were aching. As she turned the corner, she suddenly tripped and fell. As she looked up, she saw a man, leaning casually against the wall.

  He had hair the color of snow and when he turned to look at her, she saw the crimson red eyes of the first vampire she would ever meet.

 

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My Slightly Revised One;

 

Hush my little Angel, don't cry. Trouble is on its way to find you, dear precious. Stay awake, keep your eyes open. Monster's are coming. Run. Hide. The witching hour is close at hand.

Near twelve at night, Angel was walking around outside without her parents with her. She looked around, taking in all the sights she could see. The world was huge from a five-year-old's point of view. When she came across things she hadn't seen before, her bright green eyes widened until they looked like owl-eyes.

"Did you see h-"

"What is she doing out th-" 

"Where's her mother?"

"Little girl! Come here girlie!"

Stopping, Angel turned around and spotted three men following her. Not know who they were, she took one scared step back before bursting into a run.

Picking up her speed, she ran a slight bit faster and her little legs carried her as fast as they could. Glancing behind her, she saw the three men still follow her. Coming up to an alley entrance, she quicjky scooted into it, hoping to catch them by surprise.

"Hey there she goes!" The man pointed towards Angel's disappearing form.

Feeling tears run down her cheeks, she forced herself to keep going no matter how tired she was getting. Angel heared their laughter, their running footsteps. Panting, she realized she was running out of steam.

As she turned another corner, she winced slightly as her ribs hurt from her breathing too hard. But as she rounded it, she tripped on her foot and fell down at the feet of another person. Looking up slowly, she saw a teenager leaning against a wall tapping one foot along with some unknown music.

His hair was the colour of snow. As he noticed her, his head moved in her direction and she saw glowing crimson eyes. Not knowing it, Angel had just met her first vampire.

 






Nothing can stop the US Air Force except lightning within five nautical miles.

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