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Marshall

3:34pm Feb 23 2010 (last edited on 3:35pm Feb 23 2010)

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http://hollowaycontract.smackjeeves.com/


My friend and I started a webcomic on smackjeeves recently, about three weeks ago, and released the first chapter in bulk. Check it out. Comments, constructive criticisms welcome.




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tain

4:25pm Feb 25 2010

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oh my god

that was probably the best 20+ minutes i've spent readign a comic /ever/

none of that cliche crap, no mary/gary sues, no 'hero' orwar goign on.

i. love. you.

The only suggestion i have is that for uh, StreetDog, instead of drawing all of those folded up bangs (makes it look kinda messy) try shading the bangs apart (think of lineless drawings)

a little more shading on their hair wouldn't hurt, either. And  since they all have  somewhat different accents maybe change the font for each of them. c: but goodjob so far.

Marshall

6:19pm Feb 25 2010 (last edited on 6:20pm Feb 25 2010)

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8D Thank you so much for your wonderful feedback. And the criticism is appreciated! We're still trying to pin down exactly how we want the comic to look, so the style will probably evolve quite a bit, especially in the first few chapters. We update two pages every Tuesday, if you're interested in keeping up with us.




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Makah

4:35pm Feb 26 2010

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I LOVE Strange. Can I marry him/her?

or better... marry him/her to StreetDog guy 8D that'd be awesome <3

 anyway I'm no good with criticizing ._. but keep up the good job, it's great so far 8D




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tinyfreya

12:43am Feb 27 2010

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That was pretty good, if a little confusing as to what they were actually doing at first. I really like the characters though.

One thing that really distracted me, though, was the halftone in the backgrounds. It tended to make the panels look quite busy, so maybe either make it grey rather than black, or make the dots bigger to make it simpler?

Good start though, I'll be keeping an eye on it. :)




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Marshall

11:34pm Feb 27 2010

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@Makah: Haha! Lucian(Streetdog :3) x Strange! XD They'd be such a happy little couple. Thanks for the encouragement, it makes us feel super special awesome. Strange gets so much love!

@Tinyfreya: I think it'll start clearing up as you go along. First group of pages were made while we were still newbie little comic authors. We're working on the flow!
Thanks for your criticisms, I really appreciate you spending time reading the comic and replying to us.




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xchezzehx

3:19pm Mar 2 2010

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Strange is mah fave character!  It's totally AWESOME!!!!  <3  I love it!  *Makes Strange fanclub shirt and hands to Makah*  JOIN IT!  RAWR!



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Makah

3:22pm Mar 2 2010

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Straaange <3<3 *takes shirt* yay =D! Strange Fanclub <3!



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Marshall

9:55pm Mar 2 2010

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x3 You know, if anyone has a deviantart, there IS an official Holloway Contract fanclub on there. We're just starting it up, if anyone's interested in joining.

http://hollowaycontract.deviantart.com/




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Eiji

6:23pm Mar 4 2010

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xD I love Lucian. <3





Marshall

1:37am Mar 14 2010

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xD He's such a jerk. It's so fun to write.




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Marshall

12:23am Apr 13 2010

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Oh Joy 8D. Two more pages going up tomorrow. One at 10 o' clock, the other at 3. Keep an eye out <3.




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Marshall

1:11am Aug 9 2010

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8D *Revives*



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paigecam

12:24pm Aug 12 2010

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Link doesn't work for me, and it says "Internet Explorer can not display the webpage" When I copied and pasted. D':



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saryapink

5:01pm Oct 5 2010

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Omg I love your comic! <3  Add more! :D



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