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Spikett

6:29pm Apr 11 2011 (last edited on 6:37pm Apr 11 2011)

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My charaters name is Christophe he is the type of guy who how you say has a boyfriend but dose not tell anybody that he has a boyfriend. He has short black hair and brown eys. He is 5'4'' and weighs 240lbs. He wears a black shirt, a brown vest, black pants and black shoes. When he is at school he is often seen leaning agianst the brick wall on the school. He can be social at times. He once told a girl named Pepper that he was outside because he made a excuse to get out of gym cla.ss. He told her he was in gym cla.ss at the moment and she dragged him off to her English cla.ss even though he knew he was in the wrong cla.ss. When his is hanging around his friend Gergory he is often afraid of Gergory for Gergory tends to pick on him. Also I'd like to use Christophe in some animal role plays. He would either be a dog or a black wolf.
Spikett

6:35pm Apr 11 2011 (last edited on 6:36pm Apr 11 2011)

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Gerogry is 16 which is the same age at Christophe. He is 5'4" and weighs 90lbs. He is a rich guy. His hair is made up of golden locks and he has beautiful blue eyes. He wears a orange long sleeved shirt, black pants and black shoes. He is Christophe's boyfriend. Gergory is the type of guy who is president of the student conucil, is in the drama cla.ss and takes a instant dislking to anyone who isn't very polotical. When Gergory is around Christophe. He likes to do things to Christophe like shove him on the ground and put Christophe locked in a room with a straight jacket on while Christophe hits head off the wall.

Spikett

1:56pm Apr 17 2011

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Please
Spikett

6:21pm May 4 2011

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Somebody please critique these guys.
Spikett

6:22pm May 4 2011 (last edited on 7:48pm May 4 2011)

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Please igonre this post for this post was a repeat of the one above it.
Flareboy123

4:44pm May 12 2011 (last edited on 4:44pm May 12 2011)

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90lbs? 16 years old?
Hot damn. He must be sick.



prinxess

5:41pm May 12 2011

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5'4 height and still intimidating? 5'4 and 240 pounds?

How can a 90lbs guy push around a 240 pound one of the same height?




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Wishbelle

10:04am May 14 2011

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MAke it realistic. I agree with Prin



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Hakoge

3:47pm May 15 2011 (last edited on 3:47pm May 15 2011)

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I'm with the others, the realism just isn't there-- How someone 5'4" and 90 lbs (which is incredibly sickly and unhealthy, by the way) is at all capable of forcing someone over two and a half times their own weight onto the ground and into a straightjacket just seems... I dunno, a bit ill-thought out, I guess? And why does Christophe start hitting his head off the wall once he's in the straightjacket? Is he mentally unstable? I don't get it.

 

Especially when it comes to things like body height and weight, I'd recommend going to Google and looking up reference images for different variations of body shapes. Even just Google Images can really come in handy!

 

I'll admit though, I had a really hard time getting through your character deions because of the terrible sentence structure and the misspellings. I'm assuming by "Gergory" you mean "Gregory"? It really helps if you can make sure you can actually spell your characters' names consistently, as well.




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Spikett

1:41pm May 29 2011

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I mess up on name spelling alot and sorry abotu not being realistic.
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9:58pm May 31 2011

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Aww, be easy on her guys ;D  She's probably young, and I find it nice that she's creating her own characters.  And I actually get a decent image of the two in my mind.  Don't worry, Spike, I am a terrible speller myself ^_^  As long as people get what you're trying to say (Or type, for that matter.)

However, I do agree with the fact that your characters aren't believable.  Ninety pounds can seem a lot when you are young (Sorry if you're older, I have a tendancy to make assumptions) and weigh very little, I know.  But I myself am fifteen years old, and I weight over a hundred pounds, standing at about five foot three.  

And two- forty is quite a bit for someone who is only five four.  They should be rather hard to push around, especially by someone less than half their weight.

Other than that, they're not that bad of characters ;D 




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