The Pain. The Hurt. The Beauty. [Story idea]


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Staryulynn

8:11pm Jul 14 2010

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      The pain pierced through me, like a wave crashing and only throwing me against the rocks. To have this, it was excruciating. I felt like a sack of rocks was thrown into my arms, only t have my shoulder be heavy once again. The sword's blade of love, did not favor me. What was more? I did not shed a silvery tear. Anger piled inside of me, spilling through the cracks like a sufficated fire showing through the burnt leaves, and slits of the wood. I should have known though, why does it have to be always. Every single time, in every girls life it ends like this. The guy. The love. Now. The hater. I let it go though, he found another girl, I can find another anything. It shouldn't be this emotional I know. I bit my lip, the thoughts swirling in my mind. He is nothing anyway, shouldn't have felt for them. Stupid Sara and her 'good' tips. Why do I even listen to everyone. Well, the hall way felt longer, and I walked outside.

Everyone usually stays after school for sports. I am one of those people who don't do them, I used to, but its been a real hard time with all the big athletes. Its not fun, anyways. I did art, charcol, pastel you name it. Calligraphy was my thing, I just loved to write, and well stories did get boring here and there. Walking the regular trail home, I noticed something. A sudden flash in the woods ahead of me.. I was always curious as I believed in every 'imaginary' thing there was, so I walked towards the entrance to the woods. 'DO NOT TRE..." the words were worn down so bad you couldn't see the end of the sign. I saw the rustle. Again, I walked towards it.. ... It was just a deer. When I aproached, it gave a sudden glimpse, and ran. It was very odd looking, the hind legs were off, the the hooves golden sheen. The eye turned so fast, but looked so. .. special as if it were something more. An then it was gone. A bl
ink of an eye, maybe I turned or.. was just seeing something.

I ploped on my bed as soon as I got home, too angry still to do anything, from the earlier event. I fell right to sleep, only dreaming of the deer image in my mind. Oh the eye still declairs specialty.

"Ayahhhh..." I streched out my arms and yawned. 5:45 AM is not the time for me. Atleast it was May, almost June and then the school year would be over. I put on a random patched sweater and blue flare jeans. I ran the brush through my wavy blonde hair and put on my half empty mascara. I didn't even feel like going to school, to face another dreadful day, with the pain of yesturday following me. It right what they say about most guys.

"Of course..." I murmered under my breath, no food. An no ones up. Aw well. I ran out the door and hurried my same route to school. Seat changes today. Fun, aha. When we got to math cl*censored*, thats where Tommy sat.

"Okay and Lilly please sit here next to Dakota. . Hmm.. Drake come sit next to Kara. An Tommy and Jacky come sit here." Mr. Henderson finished seating us. I was out raged! The rest of the year, by my heartbreaker. It wouldn't do. I doodled on my side sheet of paper, and waited to get out of school.

"Hey, look.. Sorry abo" I cut his sentenice off.

"Don't care, don't want to hear it. Tommy." I muttered to his face, quickly. Numbly, he turned his face and chewed his pencil. When we finally got out of school I went on my same walking route. I tied my hair up with a random purple ribbon, and gained a pace to walk home.

Then I saw it. The rustle, in the woods. Oh very slight this time. I followed it. Determined to find the creature and look it in the eye. It was there. Again. The deer, with the weird hind legs. It only hid behind a bush, but I could see it. I got to its eyes, it about blinded me! They were purple! Pure purple with a dark pupil. I saw it. Then more pain was pushed into me, like the feeling of having you heart broken. Being the day before. My words slurred, then it went dark.

Comments appreciated! Will keep writing if people like it.

So well my idea ~ This girl, Jackalyn or Jacky gets her heart broken by a guy she has been in love with, well they were boy friend and girl friend, going strong. She walks home and meet an odd deer, who is actually a Purple haired, and purple eyed genie. This is not a regular genie, it has twists.




-and a new day will dawn, for those who stand long, and the forest will echo with laughter-
MysticalWonder

8:19pm Jul 14 2010

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Hm. I'm interested to see where this will go. Good so far, but you have a tendancy to repeat words over and over again.



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