Section from the Book i'm writing, Critics wanted


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Jemi

4:25am May 17 2010

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Comments and ti
tle suggestions wanted, this piece is from the final battle at the end, so don't worry if you don't know who all the characters are and stuff

 

 

I shifted knowing death was waiting, I ran away from Sai thinking that if I fought and died, he would survive and take care of India and maybe one day love her has he had loved me.

He would never forgive me for doing what I thought would protect him. he would never have the chance to, but I would wait for him in the light.

I came to the stream where I had come only once before, the first time I shifted.         

It seemed fitting for me to come here, and for my nightmare to be here too. I watched in silent horror as the smilodons melted from the shadows, sabers gilinting in the moonlight, they were easily bigger than me, even in moon cat form, alone i was no match for even just one of them.

 




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Jemi

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kogerer

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i luv it! 



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Jemi

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thank you and here is some more

I tried to focus, trying to use my power to even the odds. but i was panicing, my mind was a jumbled mess and in this state i was going to be an easy defeat. 

I heard a roar not far away, that would have been Sai trying to save me. a few seconds later the pride emerged from the shadows of the trees ready for battle.




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Kitnye

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i can't give a good critic because i'm confused. also it's 'panicking' not panicing ( that was probably an error on your part but I'm just saying).

 




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I love it, Jemi! <3



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Jemi

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Thank you, and the panicking' not panicing, thing was a typo 



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