Platinum Chronicles.


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Zeno

4:16pm Aug 19 2010 (last edited on 4:56pm Aug 19 2010)

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Prelude

My name is Platinum. Platinum Peace. Though with wanted papers of me scattered around, my own storehouse of guns, and my face on every cop's wall, i am all but peaceful. And right now, i'm in one heck of a mess caused by my latest adventure. How did i end up in this mess? This was the only thing I could think about. I have done much wrong in the past, and now, it's coming back to haunt me...Figures this would happen, with all the things i've done. To my left, an army of angry people from all across the country, all wanting me beat to a pulp. To my right, almost every type of police force there is, just aiting for a chance to put us in solitairy confinement. In front of me, a blazing fire blocking my escape. And to my back, the only re*censored*urement I had, my friends backing me up. It's amazing that only a few weeks ago, we were enjoying our nice hooligan life. Now, we're the most wanted criminals in this small peaceful country. They say that your life flashes before your eyes when you're about to die. With about 50 thousand guns pointed at me and my pals, this would be one of those times. The only thing going through my mind, though, was what has happened since we moved here. It was about 5 weeks ago.....

 

 Chapter 1: preperations

"PLATINUM! stop sleeping and come help us you lazy pig!" I don't like being shouted at. Espescially from a guy like Oni. Oni is the brains in my group. He wears a white tee-shirt, regular jeans, and a blue jacket is tied around his waist. He would look normal, if he didn't have his face wrapped in red ribbon type stuff. I'm amazed he can breath through that thing.  I look less normal though, with a camo jacket, baggy brown pants, a shovel strapped to my back, and silver spiky hair.

"Did you hear me plat?!"

"Yes. I am helping. By supervising you two working."

"You aren't even doing that...you look like you were about to take a nap."

"You can't prove that."

Now he was ticked. "Now listen here platinum peace, if you don't lift your butt up and help us move this crud..." I was suddenly face to face with a roaring chainsaw. "...I'm gonna saw your thick walnut of a skull in half!!!" I was about to pull my trusty shovel out and start brawling with oni like  usual, when my other friend, Blaze, came out of the house. He was in his usual black sleeveless shirt, black jeans, his sword in it's sheath by his side, and his bright red spiked hair looked like it could guide a man out of a pitch black cave.

"Stop it you two. We're trying to move stuff, not destroy it. We haven't even left yet and you guys are already at each others necks." He started putting some boxes in our truck. "This all cost a lot of money, and unless you wanna be on the sharp end of my sword, You better not break anything."

"Alright, alright...wait, didn't you buy all this with stolen bank money?" I asked.

"So? It's money nonetheless, and i don't like wasting money. Now then, MOVE IT!!!!"
Oni and i put our weapons away, sighed, then helped pack the truck. This was a cross country trip, so we needed a lot of stuff, and a big truck. And seeing as our truck was big enough to be a 2 story house on 8 wheels, we were set. As i was putting the last box in, i saw a lit torch land by my leg.

"What in the world...?" Then, it hit me. I looked behind my back, And saw an angry mob approaching.

"There they are!"
"Those people ruined our town!"
"And caused it to go bankrupt too!"

I loaded the last box and jumped into the truck. "Step on it Blaze! They're after us! And i think one of them had a minigun." He started the car, and hit the gas. I stuck my head out the window to laugh at the dissapointed mob, and ended up with broken gl*censored* in my face. With that, we were off on our next little journey.

 

this is the prelude and first chapter to a book i'm ATTEMPTING to make. all feedback is appreciated :)

 

 




Earthrabbit1

9:05pm Aug 24 2010

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(( It's good! Although  I'm not one to critisize, becuase I dont' think I'm that good at it either. You should capitilze words, that start sentences. XD But it is good! ))



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