Making It Big.{My new story. Please read!!}


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Mechromancer

7:31pm Nov 26 2010 (last edited on 6:19pm Nov 28 2010)

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Chapter One: The Dream

 

I looked around, waiting to wake up from this unknown nightmare. I thought the Devil was here.

“I shall take you as my slave. I want you to be dead. A corpse.” I heard a voice say.

 It sounded like a guy. I couldn’t make it out.

“Rocky. Wake up.” I heard.

 My brother? What is he doing here? I asked myself. The darkness drifted away, I found myself in my room. My brother shaking me, wanting me to wake up. I gasped.

“W-” I asked.

 My brother looked at me like I was insane.

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“Rock. Mom and dad left to get us some breakfast. They wanted me to wake you up.” He told me.

“Thanks Ty. “ I said.

“Happy Birthday, Rock.” Ty said. “Thanks.” I said.

“C.C called. She said to meet her at her apartment. “ Ty told me. I nodded and grabbed my clothes for the day. Ty left the room so I could get dressed. I walked out of my room.

“Ty?” I asked.

“In here!” He called. I took a deep breath. In the living room, Ty was dancing to Bring Me To Life by Evanescence. He just started the song.

“Ty, replay.” I said. He nodded and replayed the song. I started singing. When our little ‘Jam Session’ was over, we sat down.

 

“Good job, sis.” He told me.

“Thanks. You too.” I told him.

“Rocky!” I heard a voice say. I looked out our window. I saw my friend C.C.

“Crud. I forgot!” I said. I ran outside my door and went upstairs. C.C met me halfway.

“What were you doing?” She asked me.

“Me and Ty were dancing and singing. Sorry.” I said.

“S’ okay.” She told me. I nodded as we went into her apartment.

“What?” I asked her.

“We’re late for the concert.” C.C replied.

“Crud!” I said.

“We can still hurry. Let’s go.” She said. I nodded as we walked out of her apartment to the outdoors. We walked to where the concert was being held.

There was almost one million girls there with their parents. To see one band. One band only. Lovesick Radio. They weren’t on the stage yet. We were able to get to the front. The opening band just starting. Bo Bice. I like his music also. I mostly came to see Lovesick Radio though.

 

 

The rest is coming. I need critisized!




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ShortyLynn

2:06pm Nov 27 2010

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whats the plot about exactly?

when i write books i get the writers excited for what is to come... like a little preview that doesnt ruin the book for them 




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Mechromancer

6:03pm Nov 27 2010

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It's about this girl who goes on a journey to become a singer/ dancer.



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Frogz

2:51pm Nov 28 2010 (last edited on 2:51pm Nov 28 2010)

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Er, Tri, could you create a new paragraph each time someone new starts talking? It'd be much easier to read. Otherwise, it's good.



Mechromancer

6:20pm Nov 28 2010

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Thanks Frogz.

The rest is coming.




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SerenitySorrow

3:17pm Nov 30 2010

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Lol, Rocky and C.C aren't those the characters from Disneys new show Shake it Up XD ? Well it seems good soo far.



Its been a while but im back~ If youre an old RP buddy hit me up Id love to reconnect.
Mechromancer

1:22am Dec 1 2010

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Yes. I needed new names. But, I'm not technecally taking them. ;D. Thank you.



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