I have this story and I can't get any further with it right now, I need help on a way forward.  Suggestions, improvements would be very welcome and maybe I can find a little something to give in return.  Melgor can morph from human to a 7 headed dragon, here it is anyway:

Melgor looked down as he and the Night Dragon left the last trees of Dunfyra behind them, his black eyes narrowed as he saw a neat village spread out below him,

“What are they?” he asked the Night Dragon with his fourth head.  The Night Dragon snorted,

“Nothing but Flat Land Elves, they do not bother us.”  Melgor hovered on his blood red wings for a minute in silence, he knew an act of outright War against the Flat Land Elves would not be the wisest thing he could do, but so long as they where in fear of The Dragons of Dunfyra, he had no need to bother with them, he nodded his heads and continued to fly towards the plains silently.  Melgor’s second and fourth heads looked at the endless, sandy plains beneath him, he could see his huge shadow on the sand alongside the slightly smaller Night Dragon, he turned his third head too look at the four headed, jet black dragon and asked evenly,

“Why did you so readily give up your freedom?  Why did you not fight?”  The Night Dragon’s black scaled lips lifted into toothy smiles,

“We are not free unless we have a King, we were confined to Dunfyra by The Mountain Dragons after the last war we had with them, only a true Dragon Master has the power to allow us to go where we will, to defy the Mountain Dragons. We knew when you came with your Dragon that you where the one, when you came into the forest, we found that we could fly free from Dunfyra, even before we wrote the contract, but we had to test you.  You had to kill and then merege with your dragon.  We did not give up our freedom Your Majesty, we have gained it and you have our lives and loyalty in return.”  Melgor’s third head looked ahead as they came towards the end of the vast plains,

“I have gained my freedom too,” he growled with his first head, “The last of my Humanity has left me, I am complete.”  Melgor grinned broadly, showing the long fangs on all seven heads and he spoke with his fifth head, “I will settle into my new home, then we will start to plan, eventually we will deal with those Mountain Dragons, I will not have ANYTHING try to control MY KINGDOM!”  Melgor’s cold, black eyes settled on a huge castle just outside a light leaved forest, he could sense powerful magic, but he knew instantly it was no match for him.  Melgor growled with all seven heads,

“Perfect,” then his sixth head glanced at The Night Dragon,

“Shall we?” he asked it airily. The Night Dragons smile turned into a malicious grin and he nodded silently with all four black heads.

 

 

 

Ooooo I Like X] Erm I think that this is a wonderful introduction into a story, so if your having blocks you could begin a new chapter? pehaps introducing your hero, or with just another main character. Im guessing that Melgor and the Night Dragon are your bad guys? If so then perhaps start with some of the mountain dragons before they attacked or after? Something to introduce more chracters would probably be your best bet, get your mind thinking about fresh idea X] s'what i do generally =] x

Thanks Enola, that's really helpful :)  I will be doing random chapters now, they will eventually link up :)